How's my writing...the ending of my first chapter?

impressive pacing. you stated someone was disturbed by something in your purposely short opening sentence. you then spent a long, long paragraph with delaying descriptions until you got to the punchline "looked just like her" This is something Mickey Spillane was praised for. Also, your sense of alliteration is excellant with "Athen's Asylum for the Insane" You are an Extraordinary writer.Good Luck to you.